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Topic：
the reason of collapse of Akkadine Empire讨论曾经很繁荣的Akkad Kingdom覆灭原因。
阅读：给出帝国覆灭的三个原因。
1. 征服地区人民频繁反抗、起义，伤了帝国根基。
2. 阅读分论点2-降水少导致农耕受影响，没有充足食物供给(enough food supply)。
3. 阅读分论点3-帝国很霸道，总是企图控制贸易(听力中称为unfair trade)，并且把自己的条件强加给其他国家，引起周边国家不满甚至导致了几十个外国国王对其宣战。举例海战。
听力：阅读三个原因都没有说服力。
1. 征服地区的城墙被征服拆了，起义军没有城墙保护很容易会被政府军镇压。
2. 粮食并不短缺，农耕技术很先进，甚至掌握灌溉技术(irrigation)，北方缺水能从别的地区引水。并且知道存储粮食(store grain)
3.听力分论点3-海战是真实的，虽然和一些国家会有摩擦，但战后新的机会和资源都会变多，弥补(make up)损失。
范文：
Regarding the collapse of Akkad Kingdom which once experienced prosperity, the reading puts forward three reasons. Yet, all of them are contradicted by the listening with the following illustrations.
Frist, in the author’s point of view, the frequent revolt from the conquered areas damaged the kingdom. The listening, on the other hand, argues that in the conquered areas, the rampart was torn down, which makes it easy for the government army to suppress them because they were under no protection.
When it comes to insufficient food supply being attributed to the damage on farming caused by less precipitation, the listening is totally in disagreement with this point in the reading. The listening states that actually they did not suffer food shortage. Their cultivation skills were quite advanced and they even mastered irrigation skills. If the northern area encountered the lack of water, it could take water from other areas. What’s more, they had the insight of storing grain.
The last point raised by the reading material is that the unfair trade imposed by Akkad Kingdom on other countries stirred wars such as naval battle. This is also refuted by the listening which mentions that it is true that naval battle did happen. But despite of the conflict with other countries, Akkad Kingdom was exposed to more chances and resources after the battle, which could compensate for the losses.
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